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Re: KILL--contest entry
This is an amazing story!! I found it original and captivating. After I read the first part, I didn't glance away from the screen until the end. Very good. One ...
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Re: Alterations
thanks :) I don't usually write poetry that short. At first, I started typing a longer poem, but I deleted a lot of that. I wanted to test my skills, ...
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Re: Don't question
I don't know how realistic this is D: I don't know if that finish stuff they use on doors is really flammable, but it's what ended up written. feel free ...
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Re: Don't question
"The end of the world is cliche. I look down and see a book that tells how the world will end. I look up and see the face of the ...
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Re: Alterations
I miss the days with no fears, days not flooded with tears, days of dreaming and hope, days where I could never know. I miss the time, unaltered rhyme, free ...
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Re: Lights.
This is so great!!! I like the line "a girl in the heart of a hurricane." Very creative and artistic!!
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Re: The night is always darkest before the dawn
This is really good. I have a few little things to ask about, though. There's a few places where some of the words rhyme, but there's no consistent rhyme scheme. ...
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Re: I'm one of the crazies
Thanks! changed the colon to a semicolon. as for the repeated 'again,' I used the word three times to show that they want to take all the creativity away, take ...
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Re: It's been a while
you're really good at drawing the eyes!!!! I cannot draw well D: but it's ok, my bestie is teaching me!!! I've improved alot, I can say that. AWESOME JOB!!
Jun 13, 2011 -
Re: The Demon Within
That is so amazing!!! I love it!!!
Jun 13, 2011 -
Re: Counting Breaths: Prologue
more amazing work from my favorite TFF!!!! This is a sad beginning filled with hope, if that makes sense. That's what I saw, at the very least. I hope you'll ...
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Re: Should've Known
Title idea: I should have listened or I should have walked away This is really good work, young one :P lol my weirdness is apparent Keep writing poetry. I have ...
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Re: Love and Hate
I'm shivering right now. That is truly amazing work tally-wa! You've improved since last we met...I need to train my mind... lol I had a ninja moment there. This is ...
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Re: Boxed love
In some places, you can add contractions. The verb tense is a little varied here and there, and it's kind of confusing. Sorry, I'm a little OCD about that kind ...
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Re: The Elementals (Prologue)
This is kind of like a story I'm writing. Mine is kind of failing, so I'm probably going to abandon it to work on another story. But your story is ...
Jun 13, 2011
