BehindtheMask

Wow! *Depressed Now* Okay, first off I'm going to give you my spelling, grammar, etc. critiques. Things I add will be in red . Things you should take out will ...

I love it. It says what others are afraid to say. True perfection, my dear. Fantastic job in standing up for yourself. Bravo. ~BTM

Hi Nightshade! Review time :D First off, I like it! It excels in conveying imagery which, in my opinion, is the most important part of poems like this. However, it ...

Hi Vee! I love this :) To describe something as mundane as a headache in so many words and with so much creativity is marvelous. (Yes, marvelous.) Good job! I ...

Chapter 3 The girl brushed her hair from her forehead, flopping back onto her bed, trying to erase the nightmare’s brutal images from her mind with no luck. Pulling herself ...

Hi Ranger! “No matter that!” it said cheerfully. “Just hang yourself from a nearby tree.” These two lines don't rhyme as well as the others. . .try finding something to ...

I loved this! The entire poem is beautifully written, and your convey your emotions perfectly. I can REALLY relate to it too. It shows many different emotions and thoughts in ...

Inspired by the song Mad World by Tears for Fears. She stands in the darkness, Counting, pacing. Ticking the time down, Waiting, Wailing. As it all falls before her eyes, ...

Hi Vee! I liked it. For an apocalypse story, very conclusive! Bravo. However, I wish you'd have put your MC's feelings into more detail. You just have your MC in ...

Hi Lele! Well, I sure liked it. It was really interesting, kinda confusing, but nevertheless, interesting. However, you did have quite a few grammatical mistakes, and I'm going to point ...

Hi Snoink! First, I was drawn to this poem by the intriguing title. I mean, who wouldn't want to read something titled 'A Lesson in Dying'? (XD) Yet I found ...

Simple, yet mysteriously complex. I love it, VEE. Bravo. Love, lies. Wishes, whys. Good job :) Though, I think it would be AH-MAY-ZING if, since you capitalized every other line, ...

When she walks through those doors, And is abused by the words She attempts to run, But is trapped by her tormenters. As she screams out for help, And is ...

I have always felt free To help those in need, Though perhaps it seems, It is I who is not seen. For each day I watch With unjudging eyes, There ...

A letter to yourself. Wow, Matt, your writing continues to amaze me! It's extremely well-written, and laced through with emotion and secrecy. It's great because it's one of those inner-battle ...