BeautifulDoom

I love this.

Whoah, I love this. Intense words and message. You're really good at this, keep writing! :]

Okay, so I've had a lot of comments today, so I'll address them one by one. :D Kaywiia (love your username btw!): Thanks for saying you love this :] Haha ...

Hmm. No, you definitely didn't come across as rude :] I see what you're saying...especially the part about how I was focusing more on the heat than on the actual ...

Weird weird weird. If this kinda stuff is what you want to write about, then okay. But why are they wolves? That's just creepy. I agree with Kyllorac.

Name of Piece: Determined: The Story of A Beautiful Jew. Chapter Two. Three Sentences About It: You might have to read Chapter One first, but don't worry because it's kinda ...

Awesome first chapter :D It really made me think, and was also a cliff hanger at the end, which I love reading. I can't wait for Part Two!

Thanks for the feedback! Haha I don't want to give anything away, but the reason I described how she looks so thoroughly is because it plays a major role in ...

Chapter Two All thoughts were wiped from my head as my family and I wordlessly joined hands and walked out the door. Guns were not pointed at us, they knew ...

LMFAO. someone has some serious sugar highs XD

This is beautiful, you have real talent. I love how you phrased the words. Great job!

Hmmm, I really like this. It gives an image of what you're talking about, but it's also intense. Awesome!

^^thats the link for the first chapter or my new story. please be honest, and thank you!

Whoah. Intense. I really like this! The description and wording are awesome, it gives an image inside my head. Very scary, too. :] I can hardly wait for Chapter Two! ...

Mhm, I definitely see your point. I'm going to develop a bond between my main character and her mother very soon, mainly because I want to show whoever is reading ...