Barrio

You know this is one of the few first-person pieces that i've read and i really liked it. I don't think that all of monologue's were entirely realistic. I don't ...

I'm confused by the plot, is there a plot?

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Hey, what i say may or may not sound stupid, but i feel i should critique somebody even if i dislike it. Did you ever think of trying to switch ...

I've come to ignore how it was written because pieces like this are always done and generic. This being said, i don't think i saw one bit of originality in ...

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I don't want to disrespect this site because i actually think it's a terrific idea. Honestly. I'm another person on this site and i don't think i'm the best writer ...

Yer no, that was really good. I do have one thing to say, Australian's go by the U.K spelling, so "flavors" is a definite no-no.

I think this story is written pretty well and you have a pretty odd style, which is good. The one thing i have to ask because it is written in ...

Perfectionism changes for everybody, so just do what you like. You should probably cut down on the adverbs and resort back to the KISS principle. The words you used in ...

Well, i don't mind the idea but i feel that too little goes on in their conversation. It just seems like two people who aren't friends meeting together to not ...

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I actually liked it. I think that you could a bit more detail. It seems pretty promising as a humourous piece and i think you should change "Smoking kills" to ...