Barrio

Cool ...image but i'm not a fan of anime really. Which is the guy? 5/10

I was a bit confused by the choice of 'Mom' and then 'Mum' and seeing as you're a pom, i thought that it would be 'Mum.' But no, i actually ...

Yer i'm going to stick with the first guy and that it was bizarre. I couldn't really spot any grammatical errors or anything so it's written well, very well. You ...

Ok, thanks for all the critiques and i've taken them all into consideration. I've finally updated it and changed around a few things, even spaced it out so as to ...

Now for me, just me, this character seems bland and unoriginal. She says she's creative, but it comes off as a monotonal way of speaking and doesn't interest me at ...

You know, i think i liked the last line the most when it says " they would also be alive if little Leona hadn't gotten up to get a drink." ...

Well, i got that. It has sort of a Ring Lardner feel to it. But if not, then no. Just how i got it.

Hey sorry i think i should clear it up. I'm not sure how to go about using the quotes, so i'll just throw them in inverted commas. "I sit up ...

Well, i'm not a fan of things set in a different time frame. I'm a fan of writing in the semi-present, as in, 20 years give or take. It's nice ...

"And then one Tuesday morning, and exactly nine o’clock, someone knocked five times on the door." I think you mean "at exactly nine.." I don't really know what else, i ...

Is the left hand holding the violin the wrong way around?

I'm a fan, i can't say i knew too well what was going on but it was written weirdly, good weirdly. I liked the vagueness to be quite honest, if ...

Ahh chasers war on everything, scrubs, friends, family guy, american dad, the simpsons, futurama, we can be heroes/summer heights high, fresh prince and other comedies i guess.

The Great Gatsby is what i'm reading, and next i am not sure..

I love describing characters physical features, i think it's so much fun. It's a bit hard to find the words and most things are still left up to the readers ...