Balaczter

Sometimes the best way to get the tension of a scene is to actually not be in the scene at all! I've been studying a book in school in which ...

Lord Electricia Kingston Charles Chuck Jupiter Norris De'Lacie Altstadt Lucias Humphrey Smith McQueen Dragon-Slayer Marquis Baron Vennitron the Sixth. I kept trying to finish it but more words popped

RAINBOWS are pretty. Unless they eat you. Go buy a kitty. poor brain. D:

Aside from the comments above, again you need to do some more sentence variety and showing. But I went on a whole ramble about that in Chapter 2, I think. ...

"...oh, so I didn't end up in Hell? How the hell did that happen?" (Deimos) If your character went to a Halloween party, who would he/she/it dress up as?

One world collapses, the other struggles.

Reason for writing: Because I love my characters. And I want to find out more about them; what they're like, how they react in situations, what they do, how they ...

"Well, I wouldn't be surprised if it was somehow Archer's fault if he was there, so I would push him off the damn thing. Then I'd hope to God that ...

On a deadly quiet night with no moon, a large ship sat anchored out to sea two-hundred miles from land, completely unaware of the danger less than a mile away. ...

On a deadly quiet night with no moon, a large ship sat anchored out to sea two-hundred miles from land, completely unaware of the danger less than a mile away. ...

“Gemma, this isn’t good enough.” Gemma let the mug pause for a second at her lips, before she tilted it towards her mouth, letting hot tea wash down her throat. ...

I hope you don't mind a sort of fantasy/horror piece. xD Currently I have only a prolouge up but maybe that's a good thing... Thank you in advance! :D

Estrapade - the act of when a horse throws off its rider. xD It's... just such a beautiful word for such a funny definition. Oh, random word sites, how I ...

I'd love to read about this. :D It's... slightly cliched (end of the world, etc) but it's interesting how you brought kids into it. Usually in books kids are just ...

First thing that struck me as I read this: most of the sentences have the exact same structure. And that makes the reader fall asleep. For example: The woman gave ...