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Hey carboncore. I'm Bad Narrator and I'll be reviewing your story. I'm using strikeout for parts I suggest you omit, [brackets] for things to add, blue for stuff to change, ...

Dear, wickedwonder Your welcome in advance for the review. Contest Entry! for Yuriiko's Postsecrets Contest Enjoy! I'll attach the picture at the end. Marissa~ I know you hate me. I ...

(Author's note: Warning intimidating block of words below. This author wouldn't mind if you would be so kind as to drop any feedback at all.) demons One of the most ...

I'm probably not your target audience but I need something to critique so I'm doing this story. Sorry: The grammar in here is probably terrible, considering I didn't have WORD ...

dreamybanana Thanks for the review. I know the summary dialogue can be a bit troubling sometimes. The problem is that in short stories I have such a limited amount of ...

Thanks for the responses. jashbagabaldo (your username's a mouthful) I see what you mean. It is lacking in imagery. I'll keep that in mind for revision. Thanks.

As you well know, those were dark times for our fair city of Acre. The crime index was already twice the national average when the first murders of the infamous ...

I would say don't do it. Omniscient voice is extremely difficult to do and it takes a lot of skill and practice to pull off. I went to a fiction ...

Look: I'm gonna critique this post but I want to get two things straight. First of all, prologues are not short stories. Second of all, I really, really hate prologues. ...

Well my first impression would be to say that this is not a short story, but a prose poem. However I've read several stories in the past which seem to ...

Hey Tigersprite You are never more alive than the moment before you die. These words echo through my mind as her scent fills my nostrils, as my nose meets the ...

This is Bad Narrator critiquing your chapter: Hey, it's Drago. This is my attempt at a suspense/thriller. I hope you enjoy the story. The blood flowed so smoothly , pooling ...

(18+ for language and violence. Also, sexuality, I guess, because the word penis is in there somewhere) This is the last part. Again any feedback at all will be appreciated, ...

(18+ for language and violence) Since you took time from your busy schedule to click the link to this story, why not give me some fuc**** feedback. Young William used ...

This sort of reminds me of Slaughterhouse-Five by Kurt Vonnegut Jr. A great book. I suggest reading it if you get a chance.