BadNarrator

you broke your heart again today cliche as you did yesterday, and the day before. contrite are you who lets lips swoon a bit sentimental, perhaps, but interesting words in ...

I think you have the bones of a good poem here. my biggest concern is that its too abstract. I don't mean abstract like a Picasso painting, but abstract in ...

Thanks for the feedback guys. To megsug: The "Look:" is sort of a stylistic thing. I started using it at the beginnings of my stories a little more than a ...

Thanks for the feedback guys. To Snoink: I've never read "Naming of Parts," but I'll take a look at it. It's interesting to read your response to the last stanza. ...

Most prologues are boring and unnecessary. The reader finds him or herself wishing that the author would quit messing around and get to the story already. Not to sound rude ...

he puts his hand on my shoulder and leads me out to his back yard there is a man’s silhouette stapled to an oak tree some thirty yards away he ...

Look: I found him in Happy Hollow, the woods that’s on the outskirts of the city. He was a little ways off the shortcut that me and my sister, Nahla, ...

Hey: I'll be reviewing your story today. I'll use strikeout for parts I suggest you omit, [brackets] for things to add, blue for stuff to change, red for the stuff ...

Hello retrodisco666. I'm BadNarrator and I'll be critiquing your story today. Since it was such a short story I didn't feel the need to go through it word for word ...

Hey jashbagabaldo. So, stream of consciousness, huh? Not necessarily my favorite style of prose but I've read some in the past that was written quite well. Let's see how you ...

Hey kakagirl. I'll be reviewing your story today. Just so you know I'm using strikeout for parts I suggest you omit, [brackets] for things to add, blue for stuff to ...

Interesting thread. For the record, I don't think genes alone can determine whether or not a person will become homosexual. When it comes to psychology our nature determines our predisposition ...

I'm not a good narrator or an okay one or a halfway decent one for that matter.

Is war with Iran a solution to what exactly? And in what sense is the US a "has been?" Is the only criteria for a state's status in the world ...

Hey jpen510 I'm using strikeout on parts I suggest you remove, blue on stuff to change, [brackets] on stuff that confused me, red on stuff that confused me and for ...