Baboon

Thanks for the review :D See what you mean about the avalanche of information. I'll work on that. I was kind of working out how the world works while writing ...

Thanks a lot for all the feedback here. I thought this bit of writing, which is the most experimental I've ever done, was just going to bow out with one ...

Thanks for all the feedback :)

Best flash fiction I've ever read :D

*edits the dumbest mistakes frantically* Thanks for the reviews, guys! Babs

Lette :D thanks for the review :) "Never mind" sticks out like a potato in a jewellery box hahahah loved that :P Anyway seriously thank you. To be honest, I'm ...

Thankyou :) hahah yes very helpful, and as for the lack of much conflict well this is just the first part of the first chapter and i like to keep ...

Thanks to both of you, i'm writing the second part now :D. And thankyou soooo much Stella for the link to the dialogue punctuation thing i get so confused about ...

Thanks for th review :D Baboon

Please review anyone, I'd really appreciate some more feedback before i start writing the next part ;) :P

Thnx a lot crazy :) other chapters of this will be less weird and more understandable i promise ok :P

Thanks again for the helpful advice. Hmmm cotonrulz you have given me an idea...lol Ill redo this and post it again sometime soon, hope you all re-review hahah

Woah this is excellent! Pace and flow work brilliantly, characters are believable and interesting and the story is captivating. I wanna read more!!! Seriously, really really good. But PLEASE kill ...

Yaaaay first reviews lol :P Thanks a lot for the time you spent reviewing and I see what you're all saying...mostly hahah But seriously thanks. Hmm I don't really have ...