Baboon

“I can’t understand you.” “So?” His voice was harsh and unimaginably cold. He knew she couldn’t hear him. “I can’t understand you. This music’s too loud.” “Yeah. Let’s go.” T

Hey Aqua! Babs here for the promised review :D Except there's really not much I can say. This is a fantastic little piece of writing. In terms of your thoughts ...

This isn't a review, this is just a reaction. I liked moments in this. I liked the "have some chances, say you tried for me." I liked the "Have a ...

Thanks for the review :D See what you mean about the avalanche of information. I'll work on that. I was kind of working out how the world works while writing ...

It was ritual. They danced, their swords clashing as the clouds moaned and the rain sliced down. To the gathered tribe the two seemed to become one being, a whirling ...

Ok. Haven't done a review in a while, and never had the patience/skill to do those line-by-line obsessive analyses that everyone loves :P BUT here we go. Good: Flows well. ...

How's this for an opening to a novel? No idea where it will go. --------------------------------------------------------------------------- As the lightening flashed and the rains sliced down, as the

Thanks a lot for all the feedback here. I thought this bit of writing, which is the most experimental I've ever done, was just going to bow out with one ...

He stands, tall and rugged, with hard features and easy eyes. The skin on his face as weatherbeaten and well-worn as his boots, his faithful boots. Both will be with ...

Is this a nightmare or is it a dream? This is all so bittersweet Because you're like the rainbow God lets me see, but not hold Any idea what I'm ...

Hello all, I've been struggling to get any inspiration to write about anything, but this suddenly came to here it is :) ---- He waited like a snake in the ...

Thanks for all the feedback :)

The cold wind scratched desperately at his face and he could feel the crunching of the delicately frosted grass beneath his clumsy feet. Gravestones stood motionless around him, in the ...

Best flash fiction I've ever read :D

*edits the dumbest mistakes frantically* Thanks for the reviews, guys! Babs