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scribblingquill: Ha, ha. :D Yes, honesty would probably be my crutch. Well, originally it wasn't backwards, but I hoped forcing the reader to puzzle it out would make the poem ...

Wow, this is so creative! Instead of pointing out typos or other mechanical errors, I'd like to offer a suggestion- Take it or leave it. :wink: I think you are ...

You did a fantastic job creating suspense!! That's an honest to goodness skill. Still, if your writing doesn't have intention , the tension unravels and your audience gets lost. This ...

ANGEL "I can and I will. “Angel, I have seen the once great man you were. You don't need those potions. Look at yourself! I found you face down on ...

Hello, I think the content is very good. But I wouldn't have thought it to be a human. That suspense, really held me. But being a human is what you ...

What am I? I am a hardened lump of play-do- A fossilized handprint with tiny outstretched digits that will never grab or grow. I am a nightlight with a burned ...

Heyro, Babs here. :D This is such a cool bit of writing. My interpretation: In the beginning the person is looking to the past- symbolized by photographs- and there is ...

I really, really like this piece. Despite what M. says, I do believe you are actually talking about flowers and not grapes; the first four lines are simply a long ...

I really only have one critique, which you've heard already- Colorful word usage. A sprinkling of suspense. An unpredictable punch in the gut. These are things that could improve this ...

M. - I absolutely agree; "the" should be "this." Anticlimax? ...yeah. I suppose I let the poem end itself. After all, I wrote it in Algebra class. Who knew math ...

Hmm, I cannot be sure if this work is personal or if you are expressing despair at the current state of the world... provoking. :) The first stanza is clutching. ...

M.: Thank you for your honest review! I see what you mean about the third and fourth stanzas clashing- it is a complete change in direction. In fact, now that ...

NORA “Might I join you?” I am startled by this new voice, and it is a moment before I realize the question was posed to both Lorcan and myself. With ...

((Sorry I have not posted for Angel in so long. Frankly I haven't felt up to it…)) ((scd: I know in your post you said that Angel was on break, ...

Ahhh. I should have known you would outsmart me.