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Hm. I'm not sure which version I like better, actually. The big chunk you added at the end of the second draft-- Men pass by her And look her up ...

I like the essence of it a lot, and that you didn't just stick to the romantic "campfire glowing, trees rustling" stuff but also included Gatorade and trucks. It was ...

I agree with clue about the ending and guitargirl about the lack of meaning. This reads like a Bob Dylan song--like Changing of the Guard, or Desolation Row or something. ...

I love the last stanza--it's practically begging to be quoted. I like the poem as a whole, though I didn't the first time I read it. The title is apt ...

Hi Destiny! I'm the BFG. I see you're new to YWS--welcome! Before I get around to reviewing your poem, you should know that YWS tries to keep a 2:1 ratio ...

I like this a lot. The first stanza is GORGEOUS, definitely my favorite. It has a swing to it, an escalation, like a cat leaping. I think, though, that I ...

I liked this a lot, and my appreciation of it oddly enough has nothing to do with Twilight or people who read Twilight. I found it very poetic, in a ...

I love the tone of this piece, as gentle and patient as the child I read into it. I thought it was a mother's perspective, but I wasn't sure. Not ...

I like the personification, but I think it should be introduced right from the start. Also, I think the poem would be more powerful if it were shorter. The end ...

I like the last couplet, the way it reflects the way he died, being beaten and all. I wonder, though, if you could incorporate "Nevermore" into things a bit more, ...

However, at some points the rhyming seems too forced, but because this poem was for fun it's fine. I agree the rhyming was forced at points. I disagree that it's ...

I thought this was a beautiful, touching poem. I loved how the moth is the older, wiser person, a "Mrs". At first when I scanned the poem I thought I ...

I like the change of tone at the end, it was a nice surprise finish. But this to me reads more like a paragraph than a poem. If it weren't ...

This didn't draw me in that well, partly because the cliches just slid right past me, didn't even enter my ear. That's the problem with cliches; if you hear or ...

Nice! I like it. One suggestion I have is to cut out some line breaks and make the longer, so it's less choppy to read. I like the way the ...