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I like it a lot. I was worried as I was reading it that it was going to be one of those poems that only describes something, nothing more, but ...

When furled leaves glide on blue sky wings, and land In whispering, watercolored heaps; when sharp The tongues of frosty air that lick the grass To ashen gray; when in ...

The Piano I'm awed by/at how you stand with such stately grace as I brush against your rust-colored wood. Such a strange bond that my heart holds a place, This ...

Ooooh, I like this! Very neat and compact. I love the "enough with this talk of weather" line. That being said, the corrections other people have given certainly stand. Fix ...

It wasn't THAT sappy! :) I liked it alright, for all its sappiness (which you should probably cut down if you can). I especially liked the way it turned around ...

Hey TexanWriter! (I must admit, I was originally drawn to this poem by your name; I was born in Austin and lived the first six years of my life there.) ...

Hi Guitargirl! I'm with Threnody, I think this would make good song lyrics. I'm not wild about it as a poem, though--I thought it dwelt too much on one emotion. ...

Thanks Angel, Threnody! I really appreciate the reviews. Threnody: about the commas--did you mean putting commas at the ends of lines or replacing the semi-colons with commas/commas and conjunctions?

I like this. A lot, actually. I love the part where it kind of turns around and answers its own question, saying that the speaker will write what can't be ...

Someone filled the valley with fluffy madness; someone dumped moondust on the terracotta roofs. We ski down to the diner in the middle of the road; dunes of untouched snow ...

I'm not sure I could tell someone what this was about if they asked, so maybe I just don't understand it. To me it seemed like a lot of neat ...

This reminded me of the countless protest songs in my songbook, "Rise Up Singing". Maybe it could be set to music? I'm not sure if the protest-song-influence had anything to ...

Alright. I love story poems, and this was a wonderfully haunted one where something dramatic happens. So I like the basic idea. But as a piece of writing it needs ...

Ok, I like the subject matter, and the poppy metaphor, but I think it could be brought out more, and that that would make the poem more soft and subtle. ...

Wow! I'm really impressed! When I read the title I thought it was going to be corny and cliche, to be honest, but it wasn't at all. You might want ...