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Good work! You always have great imagery it seems. I love the variation in the images, very memory-like, and the way they give the reader such a feel for what ...

This reminds me of the poem "My Papa's Waltz". I thought you had a good ending here - work on knowing what your story is, it seems a little vague, ...

i love the line Hair held out, the wild branches of a bramble bush that was nice. but yeah, the emerald blades and crystal tears didn't really do it for ...

yes, stunned spectators of beauty - i would fall into that category right now. that's gorgeous; i love the way you didn't linger on her pain, just mentioned it, so ...

i liked this poem because the narrator seems like an interesting character, who has her own way of seeing things; it kind of reminds me of a sharon creech book, ...

i liked the first stanza, and the way that rain image carried throughout the poem. for a lot of the poem i felt like an outsider though, since i didn't ...

this question is sincere, i'm honestly not trying to by sarcastic... did you mean to capitalize each "morns", and spell "beautyfuly" like that? i'm just wondering because my friend always ...

i particularly like the last four lines: Please stop. Can’t you see? By hurting you, I’m hurting me. No more pain, no more sorrow, No more memories by tomorrow. though ...

the finger-smudged glass panes and the clank of doors as we pushed them open, ran into the silently gray rain. -"it's raining!" she cried. -and we pronounced it deep and ...

i like this poem a lot, especially the image of wading through words... We walk centuries deep in words, so many words, so many syllables. great imagery the whole way ...

thanks! yeah, i think i agree, now that i look at it that line does kind of stand out. thanks, that was really helpful!

all of these words seem very vague ... they're the kind of words philosophers debate the meaning of for years, that people throw out in graduation speeches and political campaigns. ...

good subject matter - it's something different, and not too vague and out of its depths in made up philosophy. it's definitely worth working on. the rhymes come out as ...

I like it. A lot. I particularly like the little bit of dialogue, how you don't make yourself the center of attention, just part of the description. The end of ...

Have you ever read The Perks of Being a Wallflower ? The style of this poem is similar to the poem "Absolutely Nothing" in that. I like the style, but ...