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I liked it, and I'm not sure why I liked it. The rhymes often seemed forced, and the last stanza didn't stay in rhythm quite right. But I loved the ...

I agree with niteowl. Some personal touch would be nice, otherwise this is just same-old blah. Cut out the cliches - try rewriting it without using the words love, soul, ...

I like it. I like the image of the parachute and that being connected to freedom. It was something different, not the first image that comes to mind with the ...

I thought it was short and lacking in imagery... the words you used were big, vague words... "soul", "eternal", "life", "end"...and the poem lacked in specific pictures, sounds, and experiences ...

I like the topic, but I think of this as fiction, not poetry. It was well done as fiction though, except for the occasional word repetition or use of a ...

Tybalt's challenge to Romeo: For the rogue Romeo of Montague: A noble not deservant of thy rank; For who would come in honesty and truth Behind an antic face to ...

I like them. There were some spelling/grammar errors in a couple places that you might want to fix... the one in the last line of the first poem especially, as ...

Some wonderful phrases here, but the style and structure of the poem needs to be more cohesive and determined. It wanders about so randomly... to make the poem lucid you ...

Go London Aspen for finding something positive to do with this! Nice idea, London! I think I'll try that next time I don't know what to think about a poem. ...

I like it. Terrific imagery - I especially love the bit So take us into these wooden hollows, where you will sap us into molasses, where I can spend my ...

This is very good. I particularly liked the part Perhaps it's a specific roughness on your vowels that makes the leaves curl up inside themselves - their spines in a ...

I agree. There's poets and poems for whatever you're interested in - it's a world that will just keep expanding as you grow and learn. Emily Dickinson is, of course, ...

Very nice. Good imagery, an abundance of interesting words, and not trying to fit too much into a perfect-length poem make this especially refreshing. Good work. I can't wait to ...

I like the imagery, particularly at the beginning. One thing I didn't like though was the way the poem is very centered around "you", this mysterious character that the narrator ...

I didn't like this. One reason I didn't like this was because the rhymes were forced, they didn't flow naturally. Rhymes have to be carefully thought out - if you're ...