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Your notebook's half empty, the caterpillar edges curling through its mysterious leaves. What dreams are kept cocooned inside, I prefer to just imagine.

The scientific theme is nice, and I liked the way it connected everything. But the obscure words, combined the multisyllabic nuisance of words like 'vernacular' and the length of each ...

I didn't like this poem very much until the last line: I am more alive when by myself. I really like that last line, but other than that the poem ...

Hmm. Well, it was a suicide poem, so right from the start I was prejudiced against it (they're a dime a dozen these days, and few really grab me - ...

I liked it, and I agree with Amelia about the 'wanna' and 'no more'. The tired feeling comes through, and so does a childish rebelliousness that is echoed in the ...

This (Part 1 too) is really good. Keep writing, I can't wait to read more!

I like it, and I can't wait to read more. I particularly liked the bit where Aramber is playing with his magic tricks, and the prejudice against the half-merman, perhaps ...

I like the first few stanzas, and the last one, but I have to agree with Chandni that the fourth stanza seemed out of place. It seemed very summery up ...

I like it. It's got a powerful voice, and is about an interesting topic. You should proofread it a few more times, though - I noticed a few errors in ...

For her the mortal men will strive, To far greater deeds than before, For her the Greater Gods will strive, To create things of beauty more. The rhythm's off here ...

This poem was ineffective and boring to me for a number of reasons. 1) It wasn't addressed to me. You're right, there are far too many Holocaust deniers. But most ...

This has a nice rhythm to it the whole way through, which makes it enjoyable to read. The last stanza seemed to break the flow though - the internal rhyme ...

This is really powerful. I love the idea of trucker diaries - truckers are a much underrepresented group. I thought you got the different characters of each one down pat, ...

This is good. It flowed well, your descriptions were wonderfully realistic and not too cliche. I loved the last line of the ending. The only thing I thought was wrong ...

This reads like you had an idea for an essay, but didn't want to spend the time working within the structure, composing full sentences and what not, so you thought ...