AyumiGosu17

I feel like crying...that was sad! *sniffle*

Ooh! Very nice! That makes it easier to read your story. lol

((I'm not posting because I don't get it...))

Okay, mind if I join? Anna Lowery 250 years sly, easily annoyed, but nice vampire dark blonde hair gray-blue eyes wearing: -red and black corset top -dark blue jeans -black ...

Aside from a few minor errors, like missing words and commas, it's very nice! Bravo!

A bit graphic for me, but it was really good.

Ayumi heard what Kisa had said. She felt her temper flare once more. She ran to catch up with the group, trying to maintain control of her tongue. "I said ...

"Should I tell them...about my family? I want to so they'll understand me better, but...I'm afraid," Ayumi whispered, glancing at their teammates. "Afraid of what ?" "You know what! Those ...

Very nicely written! I can't wait to read the rest! Other than a few minor mistakes, I saw nothing wrong with it. You're an excellent writer! AG

Ayumi growled to herself, but she was glad Isumi had changed the subject. She glanced at Emi, an I-want-to-talk-to-you-later look in her eyes. She backed up Isumi's question. "It's got ...

((Anyone alive?))

[b]This is the old version. The new version is much more accurate and understandable. It is titled "Ayumi." [/b] ((Since this is a SUPER long chapter, I'm splitting it into ...

Ayumi turned away from the group and examined her arm. The cut wasn't too had just bled a lot. She released a slight stream of chakra onto the wound to ...

Yeah, peoples who post in the future: I'll admit, I hadn't seen the Uchiha brothers episodes the introduce Itachi when I wrote this. I just made the conclusion he may ...

"Unless you want the Tsuchikage on our backs, no. All we can do is stay on guard and finish the mission," he finally admitted. "We can expect stronger ninja, as ...