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Re: Autumn
This is really beautiful! (Then again, maybe I'm just biased because my name is Autumn...? ;)) "A winding trail teeming with life"
Sep 10, 2011 -
Re: Hide And Seek
I love this! Your use of rhyming was fantastic. Usually a rhyming poem sounds cheesy and dumb because of the restriction of words, but this came of really nicely. "A ...
Sep 10, 2011 -
Re: Together Again: Chapter 2
Edward’s white, beautiful face stared at me from where he clung to the window sill. I thought about screaming. I thought about running. I thought about opening the window and ...
Sep 9, 2011 -
Re: I miss you
This is great! I like the rhyming, though it sounded a little constricted. But it flows nicely :) I like how you said "I am unspoken." "You make me smile. ...
Sep 9, 2011 -
Re: In Memoriam
I like this :) It gave me chills. Personally, I don't remember 9-11. But it sounds horrible (duh), and I know it was painful for a lot of people (especially ...
Sep 9, 2011 -
Re: Together Again
I walked slowly up the stairs. Now that I had fully awakened, the hurt was starting to catch up with me. I clutched at my sides, the hole ripping through ...
Sep 8, 2011 -
Re: Death
Eyes burning, Lungs aching No one to save me, I sink ever further The world is dark, But somewhat peaceful Will it stay this way? No air in this prison, ...
Sep 8, 2011 -
Re: Blade-Song
I really like this :) It's short and to the point (literally :P) "Paint me a picture, A splatter of red,"
Sep 8, 2011 -
Re: NaNoWriMo 2011, who's ready?
I'm ready!!! I didn't get very far last year (only 5,000 words :(), so I'm going with my old story. I have so many kinks to work out! Hopefully I ...
Sep 7, 2011 -
Re: Sink and Soak
This is really deep. I can totally see this as a song. Like the rating implies, it is a little disturbing, but I still like it :) It's very raw, ...
Sep 7, 2011 -
Re: When everyone forgot, he remembered.
I really like this poem :) It's deep, and I like the shift in the middle. The beginning takes on a different meaning after the shift. The words may be ...
Sep 7, 2011 -
Re: Death
This is great :) I like the repetition of the word "one" in the first three stanzas. It gave it some nice rhythm. "Death is a carnivore, a beast"
Sep 6, 2011 -
Re: What was/is your favourite children's book?
I loved the Velveteen Rabbit or How Toys Become Real by Margery Williams. In fact, I still love it! Dr. Seuss was also marvelous :)
Aug 30, 2011 -
Re: What do all these stars mean??
I'm pretty new to YWS, so I don't know much about this site. I just want to know what the stars on profiles mean. And the badges. And the point ...
Aug 30, 2011 -
Re: Dumb it Down??
I love the idea of this poem! It speaks loudly to me :) There were a few confusing points caused by grammatical error, such as this: "This man made issue." ...
Aug 30, 2011
