Auteur

His eyes were glazed, closed over slightly. Beneath his pale eyelids were dull, grey eyes. I could almost see the purple and blue veins throbbing under his skin, he was ...

I really like this, Olli :)

Okay, so I didn't really see any mistakes with this, some of the lines were a bit sketchy, but all in all, I loved this poem! It's one of the ...

Japanese is correct :P

Hi, welcome to YWS :)

Reaaally reaaally liked this. Good job! One of the best poems I've read on YWS so far. :D

Heeeeeeeeeeeeey Biffle! :P I've already read this story...but I'll comment on it anyway. Hm uh, I'd take out the 'darn' in the first sentence. Also, if the guy is picking ...

sorry, but IS there going to be another part? i would like to know about it. don't want to ask too much, plus my review was long and not that ...

Really, really liked this. I loved the twist in the was very original. However I felt like a bit more describing could be done, perhaps a little more in length, ...

It's beautiful.

I liked it :)

It depends on what I'm writing. I usually write really morbid stuff, but I'm not a morbid person, I just love getting into other peoples shoes ^.^ And most of ...

Konichiwa ^.^ Watashi wa Auteur desu :) Doozo yoroshiku. Haha hope you can understand that? Welcome to YWS!

I agree with Toto25, it is a very thought provoking poem. It reminds me of a mother thats given up her child...not sure why. Other guesses would be a soulmate ...

Hey Olli, sorry I've taken forever to give this a review. Anywhoos, yeah, basically, it was good, but really short. Add a bit more to it maybe? I especially love ...