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Re: Lifewish: Chapter One
Hey penprincess! I liked this, I think it has tons of potential. I particularly liked the repetition of the the line, "How can your surrender when you were never fighting ...
May 2, 2011 -
Re: Touch of Death Chapter 1
Hey! So, this is a cute piece, a high school drama, and I really think it has potential. A love triangle, interplays of relationships and all that. However, I think ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: The Gods play Marbles
Hello again! So I really liked the tone of this piece, it was satirical and removed, and I definitely smiled in a few places. I also think the idea you ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: Review Teams!
Quick question. If someone posts a literary work, does that effect his or her team points negatively?
May 1, 2011 -
Re: Those Times
Hey! You have something interesting here! I assume it's set in some other time period? What with the carriages, horses, mansions, and teenage marriages and all. Intriguing indeed. First, as ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: Dearly Beloved
Hey! This is lovely. =) Your prose is beautiful, like, really beautiful. I am seriously jealous of your mastery of vocabulary, it rare thing when I have to pull out ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: Feed The Pink Elephant! [Open!]
Hello! I was wondering if you might be able to review this for me? Thanks so much! Audrey
Apr 29, 2011 -
Re: Reflection
Hey Alexwriter! Interesting idea you have here! I definitely liked the way you characterized the foster parents, you get a good sense of who they are, just from those few ...
Apr 29, 2011 -
Re: The Art of Dying
You knew you were in trouble when you stopped sweating. You had finished off the water two and a half days ago. The empty bottle hung lifeless by your side, ...
Apr 29, 2011 -
Re: Hanging
Hey Cspr! So I liked the setting of this story, this dark, urban, gritty feel really appeals to me. I really got a sense of the atmosphere and mood, I ...
Apr 28, 2011 -
Re: Charlie Sheen Lost His Marbles?
There's significant evidence that Charlie Sheen is bipolar, and was manic at the time of the interviews. Symptoms of Bipolar Disorder include: unrealistic grandiose delusions about oneself or one's ab
Apr 14, 2011 -
Re: Some Fantastic Links
Recently, I have found some fantastic websites that I think fellow YWSers will find really useful. So I decided to share them with you all. For Inspiration 100 Best First ...
Apr 13, 2011 -
Re: Writing Prompts
Yes. :) These are good prompts. You can find them, as well as many others at
Apr 11, 2011 -
Re: My Problem with Third Person
Thank-you for your suggestions! ^^ They will definitely help as I try edit my work.
Apr 10, 2011 -
Re: The Puppet Master
Hello Searria! So obviously, you have the start of a very powerful emotional story here. From what I can tell, you have a good concept. This story, with a little ...
Apr 9, 2011
