Aubree

This is a realllly good story. Keep writing.

Okay. This is really bugging me. In the last four or so chapters, you say something like 'she had a mild concussion, broke a rib, bla bla bla.' That is ...

You just HAAD to leave me hanging like that!!! I was really hyped up and then I realized it was the end of the page. I am soooooo not inspired. ...

You should have made her into a vamp. Woulda been cool.

Hey!!! :D Gr-8 story. I love it. :D Problem: Your punctuation is driving me insane!!!! :x Next time you post, do spell check. Please. You have some parts in your ...

Gr8 job COntinue. Please. (I chat speak all the time)

Okay, This is my first romance. I think. I'm scared. DONT ASSASINATE ME IF I SCREW UP!!!

*NOTE-this is goes from third person to first person. Just throwing it out there, wanted to see how ya'll liked it. The two girls plopped down on the trampoline, both ...

Rate it R. The lyrics are unbearable. I dont get it. It is just trash and it sounds like you're Chris Brown- it sounds like your about to abuse the ...

OH MY FREAKING GOSH!!! I absoulutley heart this!! I love this part: EDWARD: [starts to giggle] Hey, guys, come on. You can’t eat her, she’s my girlfriend. [JASPER, EMMET, ROSALIE, ...

I thought I mentioned there were a few others....Guess not. Well. I'll change it a bit. But you liked it? Should I continue?

Sorry. Pressed the wrong button. But as I was saying, I didn't even know what 'it' was. Change it to, Where should we eat today, or where we gonna chow, ...

Hey Merry!! Haven!!! I have all the time in the world to review, so I'm gonna critique everything that's not right or I don't like. Now, Lets start off with ...

I twirled my pencil. Only thirty minutes and I'd be home. More importantly, away from this prison called 'High School'. I started absentmindedly singing Big City Dreams. Not loudly. Just ...

She stopped in her tracks and looked at me with her whats-with-you looks A comma after with her would make a huge difference. And I'd drop the s on looks. ...