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  • Action/Adventure Novels Re: Shades of Violet(1)[revised]

    I loved this. While there were some awkward phrases and probably some grammatical errors, I'm not one to get real nit-picky with critiques, and I can't find any real pressing ...

    Mar 4, 2010
  • Action/Adventure Short Stories Re: A scene from my story

    removed

    Mar 3, 2010
  • Action/Adventure Short Stories Re: A scene from my story

    removed

    Mar 2, 2010
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Swimming Against the Kolyma River

    With everyone commenting on the beauty of your opening paragraph (with which I agree), I just wanted to clarify by "passive voice" I mean the grammatical use of "is", "were", ...

    Mar 2, 2010
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: short excerpt from my story

    *removed

    Mar 2, 2010
  • General Fiction Novels Re: The Last Cry Of Crime (Prologue)

    I liked it, you can write really well. One thing though, it was a bit over-descriptive for my taste; by the second paragraph I was kinda thinking "I get it ...

    Mar 2, 2010
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Lucita

    Good job. I liked how it wasn't your cliche high school story about girl meets boy :). But mostly I just wanted to correct your Spanish. Now, the extent of ...

    Mar 2, 2010
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Sleep Now My Child

    Damn, this is really good. I'm trying to maintain a distinct voice while at the same time covering a broad range of emotions. ^ I thought you did that perfectly; ...

    Feb 27, 2010
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Beware Doll, You're Bound to Fall

    Wow, solid observations, thank you so much for reviewing it! Haha, yeah Adele is freaky. I can't really explain much more though, it's too complicated, but you'll probably understand a ...

    Feb 27, 2010
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Swimming Against the Kolyma River

    I really liked this; you have a talent for creating a scene and drawing a reader in. I only have a few comments. First of all, is this about the ...

    Feb 27, 2010
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Beware Doll, You're Bound to Fall

    *removed

    Feb 27, 2010


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