Attolia

Hey everyone. This is pure experimentation; I haven't done anything like this before. Tell me what you think, and feel free to rip it apart. ----- Beggars swarm the streets ...

Hey, AM. (Do you like to be called that?) As a whole I found this entertaining and easy to read. Ash Maverick is a total witch! Literally. She just doesn’t ...

Hey Forestqueen. She was lying, my parents weren’t dead! They were at home, still alive. Dad was making French Toast and sausage while mom was squeezing orange juice from fresh ...

Areida - thank you so much for this review and the one on my first chapter! Your opinion means a lot. I'm afraid chapter 1 isn't quite as neat and ...

Wow, thanks Snoink! You're like, famous on this site so coming from you that means a lot! :)

Hi chrisscoff! It was almost the end of La Liga, and the Real Madrid squad was starting to feel defeated as they were still behind Barcelona. First reading this line, ...

Thanks a million!! Yeah I guess I'll just play around with this and probably not have it be the prologue. I was just trying to think of a way to ...

I'm purposely not describing the people much, but tell me if you like how that works or not. Also, do you think overall it works as a prologue? Would you ...

Would you mind reviewing chapter 1 of my piece? I posted it a little while back and have since edited it and fixed it up a bit according to the ...

Thank you Baboon and Lauren. Yeah I kind of slacked when writing the fight scene; I put off writing it and the end of the chapter for the longest time, ...

:) It's kind of rough, but be brutal. Well-dressed figures swirled in the ballroom, for the moment careless to the events occurring in the world outside. Merry music resonated from ...

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I really like this. You did your characterizations really well; I feel like I have a grasp of who your characters are. Great dialogue, too. The only thing I have ...

Great work, sorry I can't really find much to comment on. Only this I would say is this - and this is very nit-picky: “How do you even know my ...

Thank you guys, it's always nice to get more reviews. :) Yeah, haha I guess you could call Adele spoiled. Mostly, though, she's just completely amoral. It's probably not good ...