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Re: At Night
I always enjoy simple poems. There is nothing wrong with them. They help the writer clear their minds, and for readers like myself there are enjoyable. This one is fine ...
Jan 13, 2012 -
Re: Anchor (spoken word.)
My emotions sway over the ocean. And I ended up at the fisherman’s dock. There’s a girl here fishing, and her brother is skipping rocks. The moons too far back ...
Jan 13, 2012 -
Re: What's your thoughts on life.
The eternal question: what is the meaning of life? How many of us think we have somewhat of a grasp on this topic? I used to think that the meaning ...
Dec 29, 2011 -
Re: Waiting for never
Dogs! This is a amazing! : D Really enjoyed reading it. Keep it up.
Oct 26, 2011 -
Re: To fly away.
I feel like it suffocates you whole, with little warning. I hate talking about this because it’s terribly cliché. As much as I try to push it away; it comes ...
Oct 26, 2011 -
Re: Beckon.
:) Yeah I know, I didn't go back to do anything. It was poetry vomit to get myself back in the cycle of writing again! Thanks Ink:D!
Oct 19, 2011 -
Re: Circus
Whoa whoa whoa! You can't leave me with a cliff hanger like that! This is a amazing short you have going here. Love the visuals you give. Of course I'd ...
Oct 19, 2011 -
Re: Beckon.
Hey yws! Long time no post for me, I've recently joined my college's writers club! (I'm in college now.. Does that mean I'm still young? D:) And realized I should ...
Oct 19, 2011 -
Re: Down the road.
Really enjoyed this piece too! Great transition to the military scene. You really set the mood in the first half about how the uncertainty was lingering over them. Keep writing!
Oct 18, 2011 -
Re: Do You See What You've Done?
I'd have to agree with Ish. She pretty much summed everything all up. I'd like to say the reason your poem didn't have much flow is because there was a ...
Oct 18, 2011 -
Re: Watermelon
Ha, I had watermelon with salt today, but I didn't eat it outside. Way too hot. But this is a pretty cool little piece I gotta say. You're rhyme scheme ...
Aug 7, 2011 -
Re: Hell's Rollercoaster
Haha this is really cool:). I like the approach you used, and it was well executed. I've heard the Devil is supposed to be a real charming guy. So I ...
Aug 7, 2011 -
Re: Elliot.
Noah is yelling at me from the driver seat of our 1991 Honda Civic, “I told you! What did I tell you! Gotdamnit Ryan! Why didn’t you listen!” He’s voice ...
Aug 7, 2011 -
Re: False Prophet
This was pretty good, but I have to agree with some of the statements above. Shorts need captivating imagery, and you have a few grammar errors. To me the stanzas ...
Aug 7, 2011 -
Re: Imagine
I really enjoyed reading this. Your stanzas are well formed and rhyme scheme has a nice presence. Your imagery detail is remarkable, really great stuff!. Whose vice of death is ...
Aug 5, 2011
