Ashley529

It's beautifull. And the ending you intend to add works well for me.

I know what can I do If you are trying to say you know what you are capable of, I suggest you say, 'I know what I can do' and ...

Well done. Don't be afraid to post your literature here. It can only do you good. Just a few things I'd like to point out about your poem. Fight life's ...

Ever since I joined the Air traffic Controle company in South Africe, i saw my wife less and less. I was moved from city to city. It was a lonely ...

Wow. They say honosty is the best policy. So, I'll be honest, wether it'll be harsh or not. (1) The best thing about this post is that 'real'. It's obvious ...

A good poem. To whoever this poem was aimed at (he/she with the evil smile) , I despise him/her too. That means you reached your goal. Keep writing and goodluck.

Literature is suppose to entertain. You've done exactly that. Sorry, I can't review this, I'm too busy lmao-ing.

Thank you guys for your usefull comments. Yes I agree with all that's said. Raz, I believe that love and friendship co-exist in a relationship. One holds no water without ...

A good poem. What I like most is that it gives the reader enough space to interperet the poem in his/her own way. Make my clock goes This confuses me ...

What a good read. You had me from the word 'go' (no pun intended). The way you started the story would keep any reader reading. I'm already keen to know ...

I didn't bother to open the car door for her. It was deliberate, to prove a point. I got into the car and slammed the door. She stood outside the ...

Very good. You seem to be very close to being proffesional. Watch out for those typos, though. There's a few things I'd like to point out. (1)[quoteThe couch had a ...

The characters are real enough to me. I admire the way you give a sneak preview of the real conflict. The deeper emotions that are hidden. This could be a ...

Firstly, I want to applaude your attempt because I recognize your intent. A few things you may want to work on: They do not matter to me, so I ignore ...

Great lyrics. maybe because it's easy to relate to. Especially when you're some or other type of artist. I wish I could here you perform the song. Great stuff.