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Is 'WOW!' enough of a review?? haha No, seriously. I have absolutely no idea how to review poetry--well, for the most part--so I'll just go ahead and say from a ...

Thank you so much for the reviews everyone! I haven't been on in over a year so I'm still getting used to things. Bear with me, please. I'm going to ...

Suggestions: "My mom has her blond locks up in a ponytail and in her hand is a vanilla ice cream cone topped with sprinkles and chocolate syrup." I think this ...

Thanks, GenShawklan! I'm glad you liked it. =)I'll be sure and check that out very soon.

I'm going to start by saying this is WAY better than anything I could draw. But as for a book cover it is a bit messy. What's going on with ...

I love this! There's pretty much nothing I would change. It flows very nicely and is an interesting piece. Great job!

Thanks, Junglelover! Your critiques help alot. =) I'll be keeping them in mind as I revise this.

Chapter 2 Alright? “Mama, don’t worry. I’m fine.” I told her as she stood looking at me over her sunglasses in a way that clearly said she wasn’t so sure. ...

Welcome to YWS! I think your poem is awesome. Its got a totally epic feel to it. I do think the words 'sot' and 'rot', while they rhymed and made ...

I really adore it! I can relate to it alot. (And NO! I am not trying to make you feel good. I'm a professional book critic. I just don't do ...

Faces stare, but do they see? All seeing eyes overlooking the deed. Justice will come, but how long might it take? While the atrocities grow in size, Swell in number. ...

To me, parts of this don't really feel that lyric. But I do understand that some people read things differently. There were several slightly awkward lines. I'll show you a ...

All I can honestly say is "WOW!" I felt like I was really there, witnessing all of this. You're writing--though there were a few grammatical errors--was amazingly vivid and poetic. ...

EDIT: Here's the rest of Chapter 1! Please let me know what you think! Daniel's Way is a novel that I am currently writing. I would like to get chapter-by-chapter ...