ArtOfSilence

Thanks for your review! Sorry it took me awhile to get back to you, I've been away the last couple of weeks. The steady thump of marching and clinking mail ...

Hey Dino. I just replied to your review of chapter one and thanks for being here too! It's great to see you speculating on what might happen. I've got the ...

Thanks for your review! Good catches and suggestions. I agree with all the changes and suggestions. Jaron's thought's should definitely be in italics and the run ons will be corrected. ...

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Thanks for reviewing! Even if it's just the prologue everything helps. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Nice catch on the fragment! Grammar, as much as it should be a right ...

Thanks for your review! Taking a few moments to give your feedback some thought I agree with everything you've said here. Hearing that the POV changes was especially troubling as ...

Thanks heaps all of you! I'm glad you enjoyed it and will be taking everything each of you has said into careful consideration. Hopefully I'll post a final version of ...

Cheers for the reviews. I think you're right. I'm now thinking of completely rewriting chapter 2 now because it would be much better if it was similar and more in ...

Thanks heaps! Unfortunately i don't think the next parts I have posted are as good, but we will see :)

You are correct of course. I phrased it wrongly. What i meant was, don't bother doing research just so you don't offend a few people as those people need to ...

Thanks for the fantastic reviews :thud: Un-marred means flawless or perfect, in fact i might change it to one of those as un-marred isn't exactly common. I've gone over everything ...

Thanks :D , and i totally understand being not to with it sometimes. Seriously, you have no idea. Anyway, It's because shes homeless. Which you find out in the first ...

Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it and I will definitely be writing more:D. Yea I'm not so sure about that specific line either. I don't like it, but I want ...

Thanks for this extensive feedback, both of you. I recommend not immediately taking everyone's advice and following through with everything they say. It's not that we don't have anything to ...

Hmm true true. A few witty remarks maybe. But to be honest i wasn't and have only just decided (since u reminded me of Kvothe) that the character should be ...