ArtOfSilence

Lol ouchhhh. I hope this isn't based on true thoughts and anecdotes because If so that Trevor guy just reinforces a bad image. Although, i won't lie, it's not entirely ...

Hey. I really need your opinions and reviews to improve this piece from here. The main thing i am worried about is the beginning as i just changed the whole ...

That's pretty creepy but i like it :D. Just something i noticed is the repetition of a few things like grey in A grey hand, with crinkled, old fingernails – ...

Thanks for this extensive feedback, both of you. I recommend not immediately taking everyone's advice and following through with everything they say. It's not that we don't have anything to ...

Heyyyyy. Pretty awesome, completely different to my CR IRL. Anyway just a few things i noticed. An ancient tome lies open before me, is followed by within the tome before ...

Hmm true true. A few witty remarks maybe. But to be honest i wasn't and have only just decided (since u reminded me of Kvothe) that the character should be ...

Hahahahaha. True i suppose. I couldn't think of a better word. And deeper than the depth of depth...don't get much deeper than that. :wink: BTW the revised edition of this ...

Hey. A few questions to focus on (please :wink: ): 1)What does the halo near the beginning represent? 2)Do you understand the end of section 2? 3)Does it provoke any ...

Hey. The hunter's imagination stirred in his mind as he recovered, and in a vibrant dream he found himself in some sort of hall. "some sort of hall." needs changing, ...

Thanks :D

Thanks for the reviews. Everything helps. I can see the problem with the lack of characterisation i was just..uncertain where to put it in. I will work it in tonight ...

Critiques harsh and all welcome. I'm looking to improve and improve fast. I especially need some opinions on the end of section 2. Do you understand it? Does it provoke ...

First off. I thoroughly enjoyed this and the first part. I agree with the post above on the nobility thing. And i particularly agree with Bickazor on...pretty much all of ...