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No offence, but I agree with Twinseed. The arms are creepy. The forehead looks big , but I do love the detail you put into her face andthe clothes. If ...

I suddenly thought You seem to use suddenly alot in here, but alot of people use words reapeatedly, even I do! I can see things a bit more clearly Change ...

I liked it. I am curious about what world he should stay away from, I will be reading on. :) You need a little of discription. Maybe you inteneded to ...

Wow! I loved it! I will be keep an eye out for more of this story for sure. these dreams that brought his life Change the to that, but it ...

I like the idea! “Hello, Death here!” He called Had me laughing! He said it so casually! It does seem like the demons are doing it for fun, but that ...

I haven't really read limitless, but by reading this chapter I am going to read it. I love your vocabulary so.....more advanced. :D I saw no grammar mistakes, well what ...

Hades is Satan's brother in my story Peris is the name of the scythe surgissent means arise in french Pleine puissance means full power in french Desintegrer means disintegrate in ...

I love the end! He flipped off his father! I love it! Can't wait to read more ! It was great and funny!

Like always you out did your self!! I love it! Alexa sounds....like my little sister... unless i am wrong is there something between. Alexa and Gary!? Anyways I love it!!! ...

"I've never been happier , " she whispered. The period should be a comma. and lean in for the kiss also as well It sounds akward... lean in for the ...

Omg! Much better! It looks so much beautiful then I imagined. Again, don't leave me waiting for more! Keep taking pictures!

Thank you apple, I am starting to edit chapter 1 it seemed like I said lame, but I will improve it! For the other people reading you are probably thinking ...

It was amazing, but a couple of errors. It sure wasn ' t easy love BE SURE TO CAPITALIZE ANY I's THAT STAND ALONE Like if you and I would ...

You have very good imagery, I love that! She hated anything that reminded her of who she was , because her tongue used to sting, it was the kind of ...

To me it depends what it is: Stealing money from parents:No Robbing a bank: Yes Getting in a fight:No Shooting someone:Yes Doing or selling drugs:Maybe a little iffy Cutting:Hellz No! ...