Ardor

Thank you skipperwhipped for the feedback. I am to post chapter two later on today. Indeed, the transitions can be a bit confusing at times but take note that I ...

Oh yeah. This shit's on! Great way to start a great novel. You are one of the most talented writers on this site that not even my latest story has ...

Thank you; she is very pretty. I have an unashamable thing for Asian girls.

What I was trying to convey about that line was that this person seeks pleasure in pain and death. Tony Blair started the whole middle east warfare thing with George ...

Thanks for the review :) I thought no one would read it because there is a story on YWS that has the opening line "I want to fuck her like ...

Very good poem. You have a great way of describing specific elements and that works really well for your poem. However, on first glance readers may not be ready to ...

Very good..........................................................................but needs a bit of editing.

My one has to be The Naked Lunch by William Burroughs, It is so realistic, and so all over the place that it reads not as a story but as ...

Exactly- where the hell is the next Joy Division? The next Manic Street Preachers? The next Nirvana? What the hell has happened? There are no more balls in artists anymore. ...

YOU ROCK! YOU ROCK! YOU ARE AWESOME! I have on thing though. I think the fourth line is a little too long. It kind of makes sense to start a ...

Hey somedaysoon! Welcome to YWS! We hope you enjoy your stay newbie.

Hi there vampirelover101. Welcome to YWS. We hope to here great stories/poems from you.

This is part one of Pornography Kiss, my latest work. This is not me speaking on behalf of myself. The narrator is Robert, a man obsessed with exploitation and the ...

Very...informal. Sorry if this seems mean, but I didn't like this poem. Sorry, but I think it needs improvements. First off, I am a huge fan of your work. Perhaps ...

This poem is bipolar. It's schizophrenic. It's all-over-the-fucking-place. I loved it very much. You, my friend, are awesome. I await your next piece of work.