Ardor

Hmm. I'm not quite sure about this piece. I mean don't get me wrong, it was well written, but I felt it missed something. Maybe this is because, as this ...

4. Too soon? I noticed my window was fractured for the first time in a long time. It was always like that, but I never really took notice of it ...

Well I listen to The Holy Bible by Manic Street Preachers. It's possibly the greatest of all time.

Fingers shattered and legs covered with scars Faces dripping with spots and surrounded with marks I can hear the slight thumps pulsing in my heart Question is- when will it ...

Oh yes I love Henry Rollins. He is so honest, isn't he? I love his work.

Please finish it. I would love to see where you- oh hang on. It's part of a novel, isn't it? Well, in that case I will read the other chapters ...

NO COMMENTS??!!! That must be a fix, referee! This is simpyl one of the best chapters I have ever read! Animal is by far one of the most ambitious novels ...

You're a newbie? Never would have guessed. That was great. I believe your strongest point is your use of language, and how you articulate words. You have a wide range ...

Aww that is so sweet. This is a really nice short story. I find no complaints- as far as I can tell you are on the right track. You know ...

Well that's nice. I like the flow you have with this poem. I have a question: what is this poem actually about? To me personally, while it shows off your ...

I'm British actually, but easily mistaken.

*15 minute applause which never stops because of the awesomeness of this chapter.*

Only 3 posts? Just 3? And you've managed to only keep me itrigued but to become a fan of your style? Man you can write good for a newb! Well, ...

This story makes me HORNY! Just kidding. It is an ok first chapter. I like the way you have used dialogue in this chapter. However, to improve I would say ...

Hi there Adara! Welcome to YWS. I am 567ajt, master of ambigous poetry and stories about buildings and food. I hope to see some excellent pieces of work :)