Ardor

Hi there peachyturtle :) First off, you need to gain at least 100 points to submit work. To gain these points you give reviews to people, and they'll review your ...

This wasa really nice read. No, I'm serious. I felt so free and relaxed while reading your piece. That was simply excellent. Keep it up! I especially liked your description ...

I, personally, found the characters a bit confusing to understand. I don't know why, but the dialogue feels a bit..strange. I know that doesn't sound specific enough for you, but ...

Holy crap! My name is actually Adam, so this is a massive coincidence. Aww, this is really sweet. You should continue it. It would make a great romantic novel. Yeah, ...

Great second part! I preferred this one to the last part, simply because of the humour you have added in. May I ask of you intend to finish this novel? ...

Hi Twinseed :) Thanks for reviewing. I am actually an Agnostic, therefore I am in the middle, therefore I am not an atheist. This poem was intended to be really ...

Whoa this is really good. Let's hope I see some more great things from the contest!

Yeah that line about chicken suicide was funny, but other than that it was great. It has a unique title, and reminds me of something of the album The Holy ...

I don't think it fits as a journal. I think it has the potential to be told as a story. I liked how you made it modern and very of ...

My name is Margaret Thatcher I changed a lot of things too soon Me and Ronald Reagan loved We should've got a friggin' room Because it is PG, I used ...

Eternal sleep... the suffering ends. No more fears; I shall not worry But how will they react: happy, sad, petrified? Not even had a chance to say goodbye to her ...

Very very very very good. Not to mention excellent. I love your use of structure- it is very varied but not too varied. You have a nice balance and you ...

Yes! That was really good. You have made that very similar experience realistic and more familiar to other readers. What I really love about your piece is the dialogue. It ...

I like how you have developed this novel. It kind of reminds me of Sandman by Neil Gaiman: how the angels interactand stuff. It seems interesting now that you mention ...

I think you overused the use of profanity in this piece. As I have learnt, you can't base the whole story around f bombs. I will admit, the opening line ...