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This is great! I'd love to see it developed in the future. I like your structure. Shouldn't it be "from that day on" instead of "from that they on"? But ...

Words take me happens all the time Words take me makes out the crime I cannot imagine security at it's most But words take me up out of this world ...

Unsocialbutterfly, this was written around about 2 years ago. I did show it to her :)

This has been awesome so far. I think Browning is an awesome character, and steals the show altogether. I love your chracters- they are so imaginative and perfect for action. ...

This was great, as per usual. But, I have to say, I find Drew a bit of whiny bitch. I don't know why but I hate him. At the moment, ...

Hey Nate :) I was wondering if I can, in the reviews section, post reviews of albums or anything music related?

Ooh yeah pretty good. ???????????????????????? Excuse me, I'm a bit weird :P

OMG IT'S A CLIFFHANGER! RUN FOR YOUR LIVES!

I ROFL'd at the end paragraph. It was great. I loved it. I love how you make the characters very true to life. I foudn it very humouress, and I'm ...

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I have already achieved my goal of 8- thinking of doing better!

I liked the last paragraph, but I have to admit I loved the chapter. I have read chapter 17, and I think it's great. But I wouldn't say end it ...

This is great. Haven't written since the secodn grade, eh? Who was your teacher? JK Rowling? This is awesome! Keep it up!

I would suggest not focusing on a story scenario, but rather focus on the insomniac themselves. How do they feel? Do they even know about their conditions? What thoughts might ...

How about something from Crash by JG Ballard? Or maybe Torture Garden by Octave Mirbeau? Naked Lunch by William Burroughs? Just a suggestion.