Aquareed

The thing I'm worried about, is it sounds like a sort of Eragon rip-off: the unconquerable Empire, the small, defant rebel group and the simple farm boy with a good ...

Oh, wait - no one comment for a sec, have to edit something

Keylee sat bolt upright. She was sitting on a stool in her father's office. Duke Simeon Patrolled her around, tapping a birch switch against his thigh. "The de Moncutan family ...

This is a story I just started and it's different to most of the things I write. I just want to know if it's any good :) Night in Chicago. ...

Awesome! Don't have time to comment proparly now, but might edit later. Just want to say I loved it!

Can you see it? Well I commend your eyesight. All I can see are thick swaths of metallic fog. Of course there would be mist. How could I have thought ...

Ok. No one is commenting!!!!

“And you, Keylee?” Her tutor, Professor Aryle looked up at her expectantly. His brows came together, as they did every time he pronounced her name. Keylee and her tutor loathed ...

Oh. My. Gosh. You were scared to post this! It's amazing! I loved it! Few nit picks: jasmine, the ‘queen bee’ of my life. Why is her name never capitalised? ...

First I want to say I loved it, I could imagine everything so clearly and I liked how you added a sense of mystique to the main character by not ...

Thanks. I don't really like this bit, so I might do more on it.

Chapter 1 Keylee “Keylee! Keylee!” The child’s high pealing voice echoed through the tall, curved grape vines, the branches groaning under the cargo of succulent amethyst fruit. He giggled, a ...

Thanks, guys, that made editing easier :)

Thomas tramped noisily through the streets. His small, two year old son trotted after him, three of his strides matching one of Thomas’s, His straight, chestnut hair sprinkled with snow. ...

Hello anyone who may read this. My name is Aquareed and I am new. :elephant: I mainly have a long fantasy story that I would love some feedback on, but ...