Angelreader77

It's good! :D Your welcome. Just one thing I found.. I returned the smile of pity as I sat down at the table with two plates on it, toast. “I’m ...

I love this poem too much critique it! I love the main idea behind it and the way you've presented it. Rhymes are fine. The title was the thing that ...

Hey! Welcome to YWS! Hope you like it. Nitpicks first :P The voices within the darkness got louder as I began to run down the endless hall of darkness with ...

The sea is behind me, And I need to get there. But I can't turn around, So I must walk backwards instead. I'm walking on a ledge at dizzying heights. ...

This is just awesome! I love the story, how you've written it and everything. Just a few nitpicks: He winced, and ducked quickly, feeling the hairs on his head shift ...

I really like your poems. First poem : Now this was really interesting one , an unusual but really well expressed topic. Just a nitpick: I write Out of phobia ...

Awesome poem Adrianna! No mistakes as far as i can see! :D Keep writing!

Can someone help me with the name? I'm stuck. :(

The little kid smiles, The little kid cries, The little kid doesn't know what she is up for next. Looking at her, I know I can't break down, No matter ...

It's a really nice story with a good concept. The only thing I can say is that maybe you can expand the story a bit. Add more personality to the ...

It's an awesome poem! Just a few punctuation errors though... - Angelreader77

Such an awesome poem based on an awesome concept! :D

Hi How about starting the story with her getting captured? Like how EXACTLY she got captured? Then you can go on my starting with the description of the room, ending ...

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Amazing! I repair my dreams, Though their wounds are jagged and deep. I heal my treasures, So they may stay with me forever, like rain falling from the sky. I ...