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Re: The Final King Chapter One
My first thought when reading this..... "Whoa! What is happening here?" I was sort of confused in the beginning and I have a question? When you write do you picture ...
Jul 16, 2011 -
Re: Scars: Part 1
I'm not sure with those bits of paragraphs. If you're trying to teach a lesson in your story don't give them out in one chapter. Try to shorten it by ...
Jul 16, 2011 -
Re: The Fourth Choice Chapter 1
It's very well-written. What I can advise is that you get into more detail about her father's loss and her friends unless you're planning to reveal those later in the ...
Jul 16, 2011 -
Re: Scars: Part 1
I like it but at first I kinda skimmed through it.....sorry. Then I went back to actually read it. I agree with ur first reviewer. People won't be easy to ...
Jul 16, 2011 -
Re: Stay in School!
I like the poem. I got to agree it isn't as complex as I thought it would be but then you were bored. Good job :D
Jul 16, 2011 -
Re: Clique Breaker:Chapter Two
Coming back home was a huge relief. I instantly went to my bedroom and laid face down. The whole entire school day was full of stares and it made me ...
Jul 11, 2011 -
Re: Heey, I'm New(:
Yo Bookworm. I haven't been here for long but so far on a scale of one to ten for this sight I will give this sight an eleven. I always ...
Jul 10, 2011 -
Re: Dead Broke -- Chapter 1: Part 1
I'm not that experienced a writer but so far it's actually a good chapter. The part about the clocks kind of sounds a little awkward but other than that it's ...
Jul 10, 2011 -
Re: Everlasting War: Pre-Recorded Times Chapter 1
I like it yet there are some grammar mistakes that you need to look over. Also the chapter goes a little fast. Try to stretch it out because you may ...
Jul 10, 2011 -
Re: A Day They Would Never Forget: Chapter One
This is really good. Keep writing :)
Jul 10, 2011 -
Re: My So-Called Half-Blooded Vampyre Life ; Intro and Chp. 1
I love it actually. Keep writing because its starting off good but if you want it to be more than good keep writing and try not to settle for "good". ...
Jul 10, 2011 -
Re: The Lost, Chapter 1
It's very well-written. There are some parts that are a little wordy and you did go a little fast with the romantic stuff but other than that good stuff. I ...
Jul 10, 2011 -
Re: Karma
To tell you the truth I think that me and you share somewhat the same problem or predicament when it comes to writing. Your're obviously trying to get at something ...
Jul 10, 2011 -
Re: Clique Breaker
wow thanks. You made this more interesting. Thanks for the help :)
Jul 8, 2011 -
Re: Robin Goodfellow and the Arms of Azrael Chapter 2
I love the last sentence. It caught my attention. All of it is amazing but that one last sentence was like icing on the cake
Jul 8, 2011