Angel17

You are welcome :D

I don't want it to have imagery..just short, simple, and quickly romantic. Thank you for all of your comments, and for your suggestions everyone. It's your poem and so only ...

Your poem was nice, but lacks depth. Maybe more imagery?

I also agree the imagery was beautiful, and the flow was wonderful :)

Firstly. the rhythm of the poem didn't work for me. There was no easy flow to this poem. if only it would rain and wash my tears away.. if only ...

I liked this a lot. As i got into the poem, i could work out the girl and gut parts and didn't have to read it which part were the ...

as pyres burn ahead of us should it be tyres? Nice imagery,the first line really gripped me, it was a beautiful line. As for the flow, it wasn't quite right ...

Really funny! lol :D

it was um.... strange. But i liked it, do a sequel! :D

These feelings are to hard to keep in So much dishonesty, deciet, denial. Is it really worth lies and me committing a sin, when so much is at stake? Perfect, ...

This sickening secret is too much to take Every time I'm around him, I am acting fake. You've lied and cheated, and unfairly involved me But this situation has really ...

I agree, that the story has potential, but the characters feelings weren't portrayed well enough. I could not relate, or sympathise with any of the characters well. I think if ...

Many odd pauses, which prevented a clear flow. But a very original topic!

Some nice imagery in this, however lacked flow sometimes

Your rage was really portrayed in this!