Angel17

Firstly; To fly home to its tree. This line was very weak. Overall, i didn't feel any real deep emotion or see any in depth imagery in this poem. And ...

The fierce ocean leaping over distant rocks, Moving closer to me at every heart beat. Feeling the pulse racing trying not to look, But hypnotized by the powerful waves getting ...

This had very strong imagery and gave a clear insight into the meaning. Very well written

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It sings like a hymn Growls like a beast Warm as the sun Dark as the night Just a suggestion; I think 'dark' should be 'cold' as it will contrast ...

I think this was a great poem. You have a wonderful knowledge of what vocabulary to use. I think you should use necessary instead of requisite however. Great poem!

I loved the rhyme/rhythm in this poem, it flowed really well, and this had emotions running throughout. Good job!

Consciousness sinks into wonder, And wonder into awe, This was my favourite part, i liked the rhythm in these lines. I did find the rhyming a little off however. Overall ...

This didn't really flow and had no real rhythm. I liked the content and this part; Tears stream down my face, I scream "It's too late, You've caught me at ...

I liked the subtle rhyming. You managed to convey emotions well. And these deep, dank dark holes? Harder out than in I loved the alliteration. This was my favourite part. ...

I liked the last line but not the second line. I understand the second line but think it should be re- phrased.

The vocabulary you used was excellent. I loved this story, i really got into immediatly. I liked the way you gave both characters their own voice(using their vocab, Such as ...

At first i enjoyed the repetition but then it seemed to much. I suggest you lose some of the repition. I liked the imagery however, and i thourougly enjoyed the ...

Homework should be allowed. Its a chance for your weaknesses and strengths in subjects to be identified. And to show your ability without the help of others.

This had really deep emotions running throughout the poem. I loved the way the atmosphere of the setting reflected on your inner emotion.