Angel17

it was like a story. I really liked it, it was very dramatic.

The poem was going well but the last lines seemed a bit rushed

The rhyming needs more work but overall your poem was good. Needs more imagery though.

it was a depressing poem but very realistic. The last line The little girl thought that her mommy was drowning This was a strong line.

I tend to name my poems after the line i feel stands out the most. With your poem i think you should call it Sky splashed with pink, hills rinsed ...

You make the poem slowly develop becoming more tense until the final few lines suddenly cool down. This was a good poem. Created a good affect.

She died in her home And no one had known Instead of the last line 'And no one had known' Maybe you could write 'She had no one' it might ...

This poem was great it really made me feel emotion while reading it. torn from me as a thief would steal a wallet I love the simile you used here, ...

There wasn't much imagery and didn't make me feel anything while reading the poem. try including stronger descriptions of things, it may improve it.

I loved this line. It added a beat to the poem. Come creeping Quietly keeping The poem was very rhymic. Good work

it was a sweet short poem, i liked it :)

Come with me to a place far away Where the birds sing as the music plays, Walk with me as the sparkling sea sways Where the glistening sun sparkles as ...

The poem made the reader imagine they were in the poem Salt caked my eyelids and i struggled This was a good line. The following last lines were very powerful ...

A great effect was added when you repeated the first stanza at the end. The poem created imagery, and the first stanza was quite strong.

nice poem. It followed a good rhythm