Angel17

I agree with Duskglimmer about making some lines more clear. But other than that i really thought it was well written. Good work :D

I really like it. The way we find out about the characters intentions through the person's eyes. Very good imagery too. :D

Only one problem; you want something from me and that something is something that I lack You use 'something' too much. Find a new word to use. Other than that ...

A really sad, emotional poem. Although i think the ending didn;t seem complete. I think it was a bit too short. I was screaming in hurt I didn't like this ...

For you I will write a song and sing it, I love you, I admit it. You are a dream come true I could not have coped without you. These ...

This was really good. the floodlights, the streetlights, the headlights it is beautiful, it is miraculous it is perfect This technique really gets the readers attention. I really liked your ...

Everyone i know has a cell phone including me. But i'm from London so is cell phone the same as a mobile, because i call it a mobile?

Is there actually an answer? If there isn't, i am right any way because i'm always right! I think? I think its an entire tree if your wondering by the ...

I thought your poem was beautiful and very well written. :D

I'm not sure if you need an apostrophe after 'shes'? But anyway, your poem is excellent. I think it fits in more with lyrical poetry though. I loved the rhythm ...

I don't like the last line but the other three lines were okay

Great poem. This was my favourite line; the gleam of a sharpened edge, bright yet so bland. This was a very powerful line and a great ending. :)

The poem needs to be a little longer. But i liked the poem. Doubts' biting chill And passion's heat Exhaust their minds Without mercy. However this part of the poem ...

I really liked this!!! I could really feel the passionate hate you felt about the person in the poem. Very well done. :D

Very gripping and emotional. Great work :)