Angel17

WOW! A lot of imagery! It was a wonderful poem great work! :D

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The words used don't really express your deep emotion. With hate there is anger and sadness and those emotions are not expressed in your words. Overall your poem was okay.

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Slime

It was good, it really makes the reader look back while reading it. :)

Touch me to make me feel I live Do you mean make me feel alive ? I really liked the poem. But it would be better if it was longer.

I really loved it. I loved the imagery in the words. I didn't really like some of the parts about the angels at the end though, i didn't think all ...

My poem was published in a book a few years ago and i got an article published too.

dark

Very nice imagery.

And a newborn baby, only just born and a baby just born would sound better, because by saying its a newborn baby we know its only just born recently. I ...

Writing about her in different stages in life in each stanza is a good idea. It was a little too long. But i liked it, it gripped me.

I love the idea of starting each stanza with 'Dear Diary'. Overall i liked your poem, my favourite were the first two stanzas. I can’t move my body or head ...

The poem was really good. But like Duskglimmer said, you changed short, clear cut lines, to these big, long lines and this prevented your poem flowing easily. But i liked ...