AneiDoru

telling me to figure something out for myself about being more specific isn't really helping me and makes me really stressed out about my work.

I would like you to add some examples on 'showing not telling' because I don't know where you would want me to put that, I am trying my best, and ...

I was told to stop describing things by someone else so I may have undercut that by a lot.

This is the second review I've seen on the third chapter, if you want, you can review the second as well! Thank you for your input! I will be updating ...

Nope, it's perfect.

I lost it, and I'm kinda busy right now so I can't find it again right now, sorry.

I'm guessing that you are in a psychologically and verbally abusive relationship with someone, because I've had a person like that in my life before. These scenes are all too ...

I'll try, also, I'm editing in 3 places at once, so do be patient, ok? it's a nightmare to edit in 3 places at one time

I forgot about the night or day thing, I'll add that in, but I was told by someone else that my descriptions were fine, and that I don't need to ...

I will try to break the first paragraph into two of them, also, how do I improve the first paragraph besides splitting it?

I know, and since I don't space things out, I use other means, it may take more thinking on how to do it but I do make it less confusing ...

I can't do the extra spacing like you said unfortunately, that would take too long and it would ruin paragraphs, I use other means to make it less confusing.

Also you don't know her name yet so why would I tell you her name when nobody has said it yet?

It will include those words soon and I want to be consistent, also she thinks she's dreaming so seeing something like that wouldn't phase her much, she's had werider dreams. ...

Good story! Some missing S-es and one grammatical error but other than that, it's spick and span! I'm confused why a girl is called Mark, but there could be multiple ...