AneiDoru

I wasn't expecting someone to review my entire story, also I can't switch perspectives just yet, so I'm going to have to refuse the last edit. I'm sorry.

This story is about a girl who wakes up in a different world that she can only go to while asleep, the world is Elega and it's very high fantasy-like. ...

When I write I write topic > action with little variation and it makes me afraid that the constant monotony will scare away readers, anyone have any ideas on how ...