AndNeverAgainx3

is the intro intriguing? oh, and for all of you guys, this is a novel that will probably appeal to girls. sorry! Introduction to My Life Once upon a time, ...

-when was aave established as a lord? or is she just joking when she says lord? -you need to make it clear in previous chapters that alex likes addo. im ...

-have alex think more about her family and dad and everyone. we still need to know more about her background! right now, she's just some person bc we don't know ...

=]] -to make the line about the elevator make more sense, have alex say "i felt as though i had been dropped into charlie in the chocolate factory (or, more ...

i don't care i'm reading it anyhoo but i'll be lenient on criticisms =]]] -this isn't a criticism. is this place located underground britain? [addo says mum] -why did they ...

i saw that. there at the top. why not? i have five minutes before my carpool lady comes and i want to. =]]]]] but fineeeee. are my criticisms okay? cuz ...

when did we get in the forest? XD -addo explaining bithols i too abrupt. since obviously they are very important, you should describe the scene in which he begins explaining ...

okay! i love it! still! the moment i saw the word "phantom" i was like XD but i know it's not like P of the O now. it's like hp. ...

hmmm... black parade... like mcr. =D i love your detail.

Dang yeah, roya! seriously, i've never seen your writing before, but i love this. the detail is incredible. really drew me in. our writing is similar, i think. but you ...

Name: Emiline Rivers Age: 15 Personality: Emiline is generally overlooked by her peers. She is a very genuine girl--she is incredibly kindhearted and caring, and is generally a people pleaser. ...

Please tell me what you think--too dramatic? Does it reel the reader in? Would YOU publish it? PLEASEPLEASEPLEASE give me any suggestions. I'm not afraid of cruel responses. Here is ...

what is a query letter? im nearly done with the first of two books that i've been working on for the past three years. i'm considering self-publication but i want ...

Josh I try not to fall for you. But like a leaf dangling from a tree in autumn, I can not help but do the inevitable. Down, down, down I ...

it's reallyyyyy good. why didn't you try and get it published like not online?