AndNeverAgainx3

thanks for the critique! i am hoping to read more of conscience, too =]] yes, the personality consisting of thing did sound awkward. i was already editing that out =] ...

This is one of my worse chapters, I'm not going to lie. It's mainly just helping us dive into the story and establishing some important points about Melody's current life ...

i love this. you convey your idea simply, without all of that detail pish posh i seem to get wrapped up in. and i love the idea you are conveying ...

it's absolutely brilliant how you start this novel. really intrigued me; it completely pulls the reader in. you should consider getting a publishing agent--if you don't already have one. corrections: ...

ahh. you're an amazing poet. it's really hard to convey something with only a few words, but you pulled it off. i love the imagery. [is that a word?] XD

really? you think it's good? i wrote it back in october and i JUST found it. i thought it was pish posh. XD thanks!

thanks for the critique! yeah, royboy is one of my best friends and we established that nobody understands the message board thing [apparently aol message boards were so three years ...

Read the intro and then check this out. =]. Oh, and so you don't get confused at the e-mail part of the chapter, Melody is posting something on a message ...

its good. but the first line doesn't make sense. monotony is obviously predictable. look up the definition. X]

hmm. intriguing. =] no critiques just yet!

ohh i see. go check out that chapter i posted if you have the chance =] i want some critiques before i continue on with the cheesiness. i changed the ...

roya, i only gave you 55 pages... XD and yeah i already changed the highlights thing and the emo/screamo thing on the paper. did you see?

I've had massive writer's block for a couple of days; See, I've been working on a story for three years and just recently I've been very eager to tie up ...

this is the type of story i'm generally interested in. it's realistic and it's interesting. this is a good first chapter; however, i think you should add an intro. some ...

i really like it! it's an intriguing intro! i want more! =] it would take me awhile to think of something like this. my intro to my story is kinda ...