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i think it's going to be the conclusion of a piece...but i haven't decided where to go with it yet. lol. yes. the theme is very vague. i know it ...

“Hazel” His eyes are nondescript, dark, and hazy from afar: indifference in a nutshell. Knit eyebrows, lank hair, a powerful though stooping figure; his slightest movement drips mysteriousness. So

4/27/07 Suffocation. The throng surrounds me; Pushing, prodding, pressing for their benefit. Regret. I’m wedged between strangers and an equally indifferent bar; Moving, seeing, breathing are each i

thank you :D

I don't know; did I ruin the metaphor by adding in extra details to Emmaline's part of the story? I think I did. I wish one of you could tell ...

“Emmaline.” He was trapped in a cave-in. Edward’s breathing constricted as, second by second, the weight of the massive rocks began to crush him out of consciousness, out of being. ...

thanks for the input! i wasn't intending for the repetition to become obnoxious the "i'm sorry that" was supposed to be the focus of the poem--how seemingly desperate apologies change ...

Background: This is a rough draft. So everyone can understand it clearly, it's detailing parents that think of their child as an added expense, and this is the child retaliating ...

not sure what to call this. whatever it is...tell me what you think! but don't be too critical, i wrote it in a rage at around midnight, so it's probably ...

yes, it wasn't really much of a story, more like a personal rant transformed into a fictitious work. maybe i'll shape it up a bit and give it a storyline.

It's been so long since I've posted anything! Hey guys! I'll be doing lots of critiques over winter break, so watch out for me! I was frustrated today, so i ...

pretty good =DD i like the ending a lot.

i likes it but roya explainnn i am confoozled.

that was great! i'm no good at writing short stories but you got your point across amazingly. i love the ending. =DD

that was freaking amazing! really great point to the story...awesome way to get it across! your imagery is excellent and you have a great vocabulary!