Amniel

Hmm... This song seems to have a clear point, and you are conveying it in an attention hugging way. The only think that popped into my mind (as you asked ...

Good work Robert! This is, in my opinion, by far the best you've done so far. It has a good meaning to it, and flows well. Well, unfortunately, there are ...

read it, liked it, will review as soon as I get home (using the school computer again) and have time. Vale!

This poem had a good (in this case sad) atmosphere that was carried out well, and you used your metaphors better than in your earlier poems. The flow is mostly ...

6/10, there are so many of those... try something individual. (is a die-hard individualist)

Hmm... I think I like this the most of all your lyrics. Just a personal preference, of course. The rhyming is good, sometimes even great, the song flows quite smoothly, ...

This song was... a bit extreme I might say. It feels really, really angry, but I think that's what you try to achieve here. Some of the rhyming is off, ...

This was already a lot better than your first poem. It is longer, though not unnecessarily long, it has better rhyming, and flows better. in this great city that has ...

hmm... the poem was nothing special, but nothing especially bad either. It does strike me however that some lines are considerably shorter than the others. For example: What is it ...

The knife gleamed in the sunlight, as Yufi began to spread butter onto the pig.

hmm... 7/10

banned because you knew the consequences of posting here...

8/10 that is a really unique avatar.

I already did the nitpicks earlier, and like I said then, there isn't much to fix. First of all, I liked the way you describe action, way better than I ...

thank you for the review Demeter. I'll nix those things you mentioned and then tell Anssi to change those parts. We have different characters just so that the writing style ...