Amira15

yeah it was a bit short! do more! i liked it!

BitterSweet I wish you the candy mountain tops throwing up in the clouds. I wish the you heavens above I wish you the depths of hell. I wish you the ...

Hey ethanswish! :D You have a pretty cool piece of work here. In my opinion, the mood of the story seemed a little sad, almost somber. I liked how this ...

This post is specifically for editing! so edit my work please! Its based on The house House of night Novels by P.C CAst! I'm sure When Neferet gave the news ...

LOOK WHAT YOU MAKE ME DO Look what you make me do, Fall head over heels. I think I like to fall, The funny way it feels. When I look ...

Lorena Woke the next morning Nice and early. The Drapes had already been drawn back and the suns gentle rays hit her face giving her a refreshing sensation to start ...

Now there are some things that didn't need detail but I think you should have expressed the hurt and the emotion in the characters more. This is a serious moment ...

Well it was fairly good, actually better than most who use centaurs and such. My only problem was with the characters and the setting. I wanted to see them, visualize ...

Its really interesting. Having your best friend hurt you badly as I can read. Good emotion, Nothing but nod's of excellence from me.

Okay um, If you want to make Istanbul sound cool i don't think you want to use cool. It's a word you don't use when you're describing a wonderful country ...

I felt you wanted it to be sorrowful. Although some stanzas were some felt more happy to me, and some empty. I suggest more adjectives describing how you're feeling.

Why that was just amazing.You really have a way with was like i was your character.Wonderfull.Now thats some good writing! As for names... -Efrom -Alric -Riven -Calas. Anyone of these ...

Somewhere in an unknown land. In a country called Sylas .Lived a widowed King and his daughter. This King was a loving and humble King and The whole Kingdom adored ...

Yeah The structure messes up the flow completely.The beginning doesn't sound as dark as its trying to be. If you fix the structure and throw in some new adjectives, you ...

Ha ha Ha.Very funny some of the rhyming messed up the flow.Its Fairly amusing. This stanza right here kind of threw off the flow too. Then a smile crept on ...