AmiiLightwood

I really like this and I think that the title is fantastic. Your piece has a sweet fairytale feel to it that is just wonderful. Just one thing - the ...

Hi there! This is excellent - it flows really well and is easy on the ear if you catch my meaning. I love the reference to the baby and the ...

Hey there! This is fantastic- it flows so well! I especially love the second last line - I found it the most powerful of them all. I love how this ...

Wow! I love this - it's short and sweet and very moving. The ending is fantastic! Brilliant work! AmiiLightwood.

Thank you, thegillaingill. I used the comma instead of 'as' as it just didn't sound quite right. I will definitely add in that full stop! Thanks for the advice, AmiiLightwood

I wake up every night With your name upon my lips Sweet and unspoken Unrequited bliss Turn around, look at me Standing in amongst the crowd Watching and waiting Silently ...

The shattered remains of a shipwrecked love Drift lost in rough grey seas You pick up the pieces, warm as the sun And kindly hand them back to me.