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Re: Biting the Hand That Feeds
Incandescence: I am definitely in favor of setting a high standard. To be honest, I haven't posted on YWS in quite a while. But I will say that I never ...
Dec 21, 2006 -
Re: A Tale of Two Cities~Charles Dickens
7/10 perhaps I enjoyed it, but it didn't make me want to go out and buy everything he's written.
Aug 9, 2006 -
Re: Inspiration
I applaud the effort! There are several excellent points! But I felt it lacked rhythm... that comfortable swing. NOT saying it has to be sing-song! It moved from "ones core" ...
Aug 9, 2006 -
Re: The "I'm Back" Thread
I guess I'm back :) I'm not sure how long it's been... but I really need to get busy here! Like the new look... kudos to Nate and peace to ...
Aug 8, 2006 -
Re: Its been a long time...
Who are you? lol :D I vaguely remember you ... ;) My suggestion for this go-round is that you spend more time "rockin" in the literary forums (actually writing ) ...
Apr 26, 2006 -
Re: Regality (haiku)
Aren't haikus so much fun to write? :D Nicely done, Kay!! at first I wondered at the title, but I get it now! :roll: :)
Feb 27, 2006 -
Re: Chocolate
envelops my heart with a bountiful love. IMO, this is going a little overboard. The rest I enjoyed! Would you happen to have anything creative on, say, lettuce sandwiches? :D
Feb 27, 2006 -
Re: Memories
Great job on this one! It's rich, full poem -- I think you should develop it / make it longer. Bravo on the alliteration in the last line. Write some ...
Dec 27, 2005 -
Re: Haiku
Soft and gentle snow And bitterly gelid ice- Winter's sensations. Haiku : three unrhymed lines of 5, 7, and 5 syllables, respectively. Haiku posted previously (by myself) in this forum: ...
Dec 15, 2005 -
Re: The Light at the End of the Tunnel
(JUST MY PERSONAL HUMBLE OPINION) This started out great, but about halfway through I wish it'd stopped or went another direction. I like the use of some not-so-cliched words (scintillating ...
Dec 9, 2005 -
Re: this christmas
Oh, well excuse me, Firestarter :) I'm from Ohio, so I'm sorry for my Ohio-an critique :P -Amice-
Dec 3, 2005 -
Re: Thinking of you
This doesn't seem to have any coherent thought pattern or point. Wouldn't be too hard on a Novice (I'm not exactly a writer myself), but do try to determine a ...
Dec 3, 2005 -
Re: this christmas
Great poem! Just a couple notes... In the first stanza, you went from present tense to past tense, and in the second stanza, back to present. :?: "metacarpals"? :? I ...
Dec 3, 2005 -
Re: don't become invisible
hmm... not bad... The second stanza seems to be out of place here... * spell out the word four -Amice-
Dec 1, 2005 -
Re: A Sentence of a New Life - Chapter 4
Without getting too detailed, I'll give you a couple of my first thoughts. (1) The whole thing is rushed. I know you probably write it and put it on the ...
Nov 30, 2005
